Yan Yongmin
WHITE HAIR I GREW UP WITH
My colleague is five years older,
when she discovered white hairs on her head
she was astonished, called it scary.
I told her I had that since I was small,
and boys in school were talking about it.
I heard yellow chrysanthemums could be a cure,
grew them in a pot,
carried them outside into the sun
and returned them at night so they wouldn’t freeze.
In fall
I cut the full-grown chrysanthemums,
spread them around on my pillow,
then a towel over them.
I slept on them every night,
with no result.
I grew up with white hair
all the way until now.
I think when I’m old
my white hair
will be just as white as when I was a kid.
Translated by MW in March 2021
新世纪诗典作品联展#闫永敏#(20.0)
伊沙推荐：古人写白发：”白发三千丈”、”朝如青丝暮成雪”，确实写到了极至，今人就没有必要写了吗？没出息的孱头子才会这么想。李白写得，闫永敏就能写得，你从整体上形容白发（形容其实不高级），我给大家讲述我的白发物语（充满事实的诗意）。
Calligraphy by Huang Kaibing
况禹点评《新诗典》闫永敏《陪我长大的白头发》：常人多把白发与年岁、光阴挂钩，不算错，但忽略了生活中还有大量人有过少白头的体验，而且少白头（少白发）也自有程度的差异，本诗写的便是诸种体验中的一种。其亮点在于，不止写出了面对人生的淡定（这在同题材诗里是难度极高的），还写出了成长感。
Calligraphy by Huang Kaibing
黎雪梅读《新世纪诗典》之闫永敏《陪我长大的白头发》：所有人都逃不脱白发苍苍的那一天，在这一点上时间显得很公正。而“少白头”则完全是另一番人成长经历，或者说也是一种考验。 采用黄菊花治头发的细节透着辛酸和无奈，结果却无济于事，努力与抗争宣告失败，让人唏嘘。结尾点题：“我被白头发陪着长大/直到现在/我想等我老了/我的白头发/依然会像小时候那样白”，委婉含蓄道出了诗人平和宁静的内心世界，也强化了诗人的情感，虽言有尽而意无穷，特别是独属于诗人的那份生命体验，显得尤为可贵。
Calligraphy by Huang Kaibing
Calligraphy by Huang Kaibing
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